This will probably be the last draft of this Villanelle for awhile - we both need a rest from each other and I need to look at other things outside my window..
5th draft
I look outward from my window
5th draft
I look outward from my window
To where I handed offered you my heart
On fields where wild gazanias grow
Where petals in the breeze did blow
I look outwards from my window
For how was I to ever know
You could so easily compart
On fields where wild gazanias grow
I told you how I loved you so
Yet still you threatened to depart;
I look outward from my window
I see it now the whole tableau
of lies you told me from the start
On fields where wild gazanias grow
And now you'll never get to go
No more deceit will you impart
I look outward from my windows
On fields where wild gazanias grow4th draft
I look outward from my window
To the place where I left handed you my heart
On fields where wild gazanias grow
Where petals in the breeze did blow
I look outwards from my window
For how was I to ever know
You could so easily compart
On fields where wild gazanias grow
I told you how I loved you so
Yet still you moved as threatened to depart;
I look outward from my window
I see it now the whole tableau
of lies you told me from the start
On fields where wild gazanias grow
And now you'll never get to go
No more deceit will you impart
I look outward from my windows
On fields where wild gazanias grow3rd draft
I look outward from my window
To the place where I lost left my heart
On fields where wild gazanias grow
Where petals in the breeze did blow
I look outwards from my window
For how was I to ever know
You could so easily compart
On fields where wild gazanias grow
On fields where wild gazanias grow
I told you how I loved you so
I look outward from my window
I see it now the whole tableau
of deceit played out lies you told me from the start
On fields where wild gazanias grow
I look outward from my windows
On fields where wild gazanias grow2nd draft
I look outward from my window
To the place where I lost my heart
On fields where wild gazanias grow
Where petals in the breeze did blow
I look outwards from my window
For how was I to ever know
You could so easily compart
On fields where wild gazanias grow
On fields where wild gazanias grow
I told you how I loved you so
Even as you turned to depart;
I look outward from my window
I see it now the whole tableau
of deceit played out lies you told me from the start
On fields where wild gazanias grow
Forever mine in floral art
I look outward from my windows
On fields where wild gazanias grow
1st draft
I look outward from my window
To the place where I lost my heart
On fields where wild gazanias grow
Where petals in the breeze did blow
Upon your vow to never part;
I look outwards from my window
For how was I to ever know
Seduction was your work of art
On fields where wild gazanias grow
I told you how I loved you so
Even as you turned to depart;
I look outward from my window
I see it now the whole tableau
of deceit played out from the start
On fields where wild gazanias grow
I will not ever let you go
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I look outward from my windows
On fields where wild gazanias grow
A Villanelle containes two rhyming lines that repeat cyclically throughout the poem as a refrain. Consisting of 19 lines made up of 5 tercets and ends in a couplet. The rhyming pattern is ABA throughout with ABAA at the end.
I can see this 1st draft will have to undergo many revisions before it is done - but that is the challenge.
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